Hi!

2014-04-22 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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In my home country, the sixth on [이름]e is really important holiday than any other holidays. The day is a memorial day for the people who died for the nation. I think that my nation can have been exsisted thanks to that people. Howewver, pepple forgot or even don't know about this day nowadays. I'm very sorry about that, and we have to educate about this memorial day more.

강사 첨삭

Dear [이름],   Hello! How have you been?   You have a very serious composition. Just kidding! I really agree that remembering the heroes of our country is very important. We won\'t have or celebrate other holidays if we didn\'t have our freedom through them. It is really sad and disappointing that many people, especially youth, don\'t really know the importance of that day. You are correct! We really need to inform people about it. Thank you for making me remember the importance of that day!   Anyway, see you in our class!   ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~     In my home country, the sixth on [이름]e is really important holiday than any other holidays. >> In my home country, the sixth of [이름]e is really more important than any other holidays. The day is a memorial day for the people who died for the nation. >> CORRECT! >> OR: This day is a memorial day for people who died for our nation. I think that my nation can have been exsisted thanks to that people. >> I think my nation could have been conquered, thanks to them. Howewver, pepple forgot or even don\'t know about this day nowadays. >> However, nowadays, people forget or even don\'t know anything about this day. I\'m very sorry about that, and we have to educate about this memorial day more. >> CORRECT! >> OR: I\'m very sorry about it. Furthermore, we have to educate other people or other Koreans about this day more.

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