Hi,
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Great afternoon too Mr. [이름]!
Wow, congratulations then!
I am happy to hear that you are investing in some other things to earn money.
And if you would do that then you could buy your won seas side villa.
My oh my!! That would be really great.
I am praying that you would achieve your dream in the future.
See you again later Mr. [이름]!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
Good afternoon, Kathrine!
>> correct!
It\'s raining today too.
>> correct!
The rain is always calm me.
>> The rain always calms me.
About a month ago, I began the internet stock market.
>> correct!
Surely, I have studyed the stocks for earning the money.
>> I surely have studied about the stocks to earn money.
>> or: I surely studied about the stocks to be able to earn money.
Sometimes happy but sometimes not happy.
>> Sometimes it is happy and sometimes it is not.
>> or: It is sometimes happy and not.
However I earned the money a little.
>> However, I earned a little amount of money.
So I happy!^^
>> So I am happy! ^^
I hope to have the Jackpot soon.
>> I hope that I will have the jackpot soon.
If so I would be able to buy a seaside villa in Jeju island. hahaha!
>> If so, then I would be able to buy a seaside villa in Jeju island.
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