hi;)
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi Lei :0
I was sorry to yesterday.
I didn't answer the phone because of sleep.
Anyway, here is a brief myself introduction.
I'm hye jin and 25.
I live in Gwang-ju with my parents.
I have a father,mother and old sister.
I'm in a fourth year student of Chonnam National University.
I study business managemant, especially I like to establish marketing strategy and divise business plan.
I participated in marketing and business plan contests.
I was awarded by the Minister of Labor in social venture business contest.
I would like to do marketing manager.
I can help producing at creative atmosphere and making superb marketing strategies in a company.
Because, I'm very passionate and creative and cheerful.
I will be a good manager on the basis of my personality and a lot of effort.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for this composition. Wow I think you are one of the top students in your university. Just keep on being diligent and surely you will achieve your goals. See you later!! Happy Valentines day!!!
Lei J
Hi Lei :0
>>correct
I was sorry to yesterday.
>>I am so sorry about yesterday
I didn't answer the phone because of sleep.
>>I was not able to answer the phone because I was sleeping.
Anyway, here is a brief myself introduction.
>>Anyways, here's a brief introduction for myself.
I'm hye jin and I'm 25 years old.
>>correct
I live in Gwang-ju with my parents.
>>correct
I have a father,a mother and an old sister.
>>correct
I'm in a fourth year student of Chonnam National University.
>>I'm a fourth year student from Chonnam National University.
I study business management, especially I like to establish marketing strategy and divise
business plan.
>>I study business management specially because I like to establish a marketing strategy and device a business plan.
I participated in marketing and business plan contests.
>>correct
I was awarded by the Minister of Labor in social venture business contest.
>>correct
I would like to do marketing manager.
>>I would like to be a marketing management.
I can help producing at creative atmosphere and making superb marketing strategies in a company.
>>I can help in producing a creative atmosphere and make superb marketing strategies in a company.
Because, I'm very passionate and creative and cheerful.
>>correct
I will be a good manager on the basis of my personality and a lot of effort.
>>I can be a good manager basing it from my personality and effort.
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