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- my bell is ring but I continued sleeping. after that, When I woke up, it was 11 o’clock. - I think, while I am young, I have to live in seoul. - Because, when I get old, I need anything a lot. house, money and so on. - maybe especially money! - But if once I live in seoul, I wouldn’t save money since seoul’s prices are very high. finally, I will come back to my hometown. - So, I think, When I am young, When I don’t have money a lot, When I want to have a challenge, I should live in seoul. - you and me are just thirteen years aprat. - my plan was to take a TOEIC Speaking test a few months ago. But When I scheduled my test, I couldn't wake up on time. my test time was 9 am. But I woke up 8:30 am. I couldn't go to the test site on time. at that time I regreted going to bed late last night.

Hi Dana! Thank you for sharing your stories. I enjoyed reading your composition. Anyway, please check my corrections. Take care and have a good day! ~KeLLy~ - my bell is ring but I continued sleeping. after that, When I woke up, it was 11 o’clock. >> My bell rang but I continued sleeping. When I woke up, it was eleven o\'clock.- I think, while I am young, I have to live in seoul. >> Correct. *** Seoul- Because, when I get old, I need anything a lot. house, money and so on. >> Because when I get old, I would need many things like house, money and so on.- maybe especially money! >> Correct.- But if once I live in seoul, I wouldn’t save money since seoul’s prices are very high. >> But if I am going to live in Seoul, I wouldn\'t be able to save money because the cost of living there is high. finally, I will come back to my hometown. >> And I will come back to my hometown.- So, I think, When I am young, When I don’t have money a lot, When I want to have a challenge, I should live in seoul. >> So, I think, while I am still young without much money, I want to challenge myself to live in Seoul.- you and me are just thirteen years aprat. >> Our age gap is thirteen years.- my plan was to take a TOEIC Speaking test a few months ago. >>  My plan was to take the TOEIC Speaking test a few months ago. But When I scheduled my test, I couldn\'t wake up on time. >> But on my exam day, I did not wake up on time. my test time was 9 am. >> Correct. But I woke up 8:30 am. I couldn\'t go to the test site on time. >> But I woke up at 8:30 am so I couldn\'t go to the testing site on time. at that time I regreted going to bed late last night. >> At that time I regreted going to bed late.