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2014-09-12 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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What do you think are the best ways to help poor people? Um.. This is very difficult topic. To tell the conclusion first, there are no best ways to help poor people. All ways are the best ways. A lot of ways are to help poor people. donating, teaching, consulting, doing voluntary service and so on, I regularly donate unicef once a month, Also, I sometimes go to the voluntary service center. I actually have thought this topic. things that I am doing are whether really to taking care of them or just to show. I read a assay written by a Korea actor, Yoo Ah In. This was the assay about ice bucket challange. He was saying that “ it is the best to be honesty in action. But, if not be, by the campaign, the world is changing.” I absolutely agree it. It is more important to fulfill small things that we can do than to arguing ways.

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Hello Dana!!! Thank you so much for sharing your views and opinions regarding this issue. You are such a generous person. I hope that you will continue supporting that organization because it can help millions of people all over the world. God bless you more and more!!! Take care and have  agreat day ahead~ ~Teacher Kelly^^ What do you think are the best ways to help poor people?Um.. This is very difficult topic. >> This is a very difficult topic. To tell the conclusion first, there are no best ways to help poor people. >> To tell you the truth, there is no best way to help poor people.All ways are the best ways. >> Everything that we do to help poor people should be highly appreciated. A lot of ways are to help poor people. donating, teaching, consulting, doing voluntary service and so on, >> There are a lot of ways to help poor people like giving a donation, doing voluntary services like teaching and so on.I regularly donate unicef once a month, Also, I sometimes go to the voluntary service center. >> I regularly donate at UNICEF. >> I donate at UNICEF every month.  Also, I sometimes go to the voluntary service center.  >> Correct.I actually have thought this topic. >> Actually, I have thought about this topic. things that I am doing are whether really to taking care of them or just to show. >> I am thinking whether the things that I am doing now really show how much I care for them.I read a assay written by a Korea actor, Yoo Ah In. >> I read an essay written by the Korean actor, Yoo Ah In. This was the assay about ice bucket challange. >> It was about the ice bucket challenge. He was saying that “ it is the best to be honesty in action. >> He was saying that honesty is till the best policy. But, if not be, by the campaign, the world is changing.” I absolutely agree it. >> But, if that\'s not possible, I absolutely agree that by that campaign we can change the world. It is more important to fulfill small things that we can do than to arguing ways. >> It is more important to accomplish small things than do keep arguing.

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