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The happiest time of my life is maybe when I go shopping.
of course, these are also happy time when I have a time with my family, friends and when I get A+ grade in my classes and so on, Like this, There is much moment to feel happy in my life,
But there is the reason why I choose to go shopping which is the happiest time.
Presently, I am a student. So, I don’t spend much money to get items which I want. I always have troubles when I buy anything. Therefore, I am very happy when I buy things that I wanted. at that time, I see the thing during all day.
Kelly, I am having a lot of troubles whenever I write in English. my sentences are always very simple and same. I write what I have written before. when I ~~, I am ~~, ... I want to use various sentences and words. How do you think about this ways that I can use various sentences and words when I write sentences in English.
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Hi Dana!Thank you for sharing your eagerness to improve your English skills. There are a lot of ways that you can follow in order to develop your skills. We can discuss some of the ways during our class. And I also encourage your to be more patient in learning English. I know that you can do it. kkk Have a great day!
~Teacher Kelly^^
The happiest time of my life is maybe when I go shopping.
>> Maybe, the happiest time of my life is when I go shopping. of course, these are also happy time when I have a time with my family, friends and when I get A+ grade in my classes and so on, Like this, There is much moment to feel happy in my life,
>> Of course, there are a lot of happy times in my life like when I spend time with my family and friends, when I get an A+ in my classes and so on. There are a lot of good moments that make my life happy.But there is the reason why I choose to go shopping which is the happiest time.
>> But there is a reason why shopping is the happiest time in my life. Presently, I am a student.
>> Correct.
So, I don’t spend much money to get items which I want. I always have troubles when I buy anything.
>> So, I don\'t spend much money in buying the items that I want. I always have trouble when I buy something.
Therefore, I am very happy when I buy things that I wanted.
>> Therefore, I feel very happy when I can buy the things that I wanted.
at that time, I see the thing during all day. >> At that time, I just stared at what I have purchased all day. Kelly, I am having a lot of troubles whenever I write in English.
>> Kelly, I am having a lot of trouble whenever I write in English.
my sentences are always very simple and same.
>> My sentences are always very simple and the same.
I write what I have written before.
>> I just wrote what I have already written before.
when I ~~, I am ~~, ... I want to use various sentences and words.
>> I want to use vatious words and expressions when constructing sentences.
How do you think about this ways that I can use various sentences and words when I write sentences in English.
>> What are some ways that I can so I can various sentences and words when I write sentences in English?
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