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2014-09-24 · 첨삭 강사 Naomi

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Today, I'm going to write about military because I must get trained tomorrow. Korea men must be army. It's duty for Korea men. After doing regular military service, we must get trained for 6 or 7 years. Regular service is what go to the army and then live in there for 2 years. We call the person who finished their regualr service to reservist. Reservist get trained just 1 day per year. I finished my service at 2009. But, it's very weird because reservist gets trained just one day. However, it makes me annoyed, I mean that I don't want to go there. When I go there, I am going to get some education, and shooting a gun, something like that. Sometimes, shooting a gun is exciting. But, it's a liite scareing. Lucklly, there are fun stuff. For example, I can meet the person who I know. So we can talk about memoryes. And then you know, you can escape from your work. haha Anyway, I want to finish this process by fast. Bye~

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

How\'s your day? Was it fun?

 

Enjoy your military training! ^^

And please do take care of yourself.

 

See you later.

-T.Naomi

 

Today, I\'m going to write about military because I must get trained tomorrow.

>>Today, I\'m going to write about military because I must train tomorrow.
Korea men must be army. It\'s duty for Korea men. After doing regular military service, we must get trained for 6 or 7 years.

>>Korean men must join the army. It\'s a duty for every Korean man. After undergoing regular military service, we must be trained for 6 or 7 years.
Regular service is what go to the army and then live in there for 2 years. We call the person who finished their regualr service to reservist.

>>Regular military service is going to the army and then live there for 2 years. We call the person who finished the regular service \"reservist\".
Reservist get training just 1 day per year. I finished my service at 2009. But, it\'s very weird because reservist gets trained just one day.

>>Reservist gets training just 1 day per year. I finished my service in 2009. But, it\'s very weird because reservist gets training just for one day.
However, it makes me annoyed, I mean that I don\'t want to go there.

>>correct
>>OR: However, it annoys me, I mean I don\'t want to go there again.
When I go there, I am going to get some education, and shooting a gun, something like that. Sometimes, shooting a gun is exciting.
>>When I go there, I am going to be trained like shooting, something like that. Sometimes, shooting is exciting.
But, it\'s a liite scareing. Lucklly, there are fun stuff. For example, I can meet the person who I know. So we can talk about memoryes.

>>But, it\'s a liite scary. Luckily, there are fun stuffs. For example, I can meet the person whom I knew. So we can talk about our memories.
And then you know, you can escape from your work.
>>correct
haha Anyway, I want to finish this process by fast.

>>haha Anyway, I want to finish this training fast.
Bye~

>>Bye.

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