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2014-09-29 · 첨삭 강사 Naomi

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Today, I'd like to write about a job. Finding a job which I enjoy is very difficult becasue there are a lot of things what I want. Depending on the person, the important thing for them is different. For example, Some people think that salary is the most important for them and Some people think that their value is the most important. For me, like others people, when I get a job I consider every things. But the the most important thing is happy. I mean when I am working, I should be happy. For these thing, I've tried to find a thing that I enjoy. I asked these stuff to many people who have a job. Do you enjoy working in your part. Almost of all people said "no" But They have to do something for living. Specially, in Korea. Korea system makes this situation. Other hand, It makes Korea, too. I mean that Korea doesn't have source and big country size etc. However great country. So I fell into delemma. As a result, probably things is when I do my best for everything, I can open the door

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

 

Nice to see a mail again form you. What you are experiencing right now is common for every human being.

That\'s the process and the irony of it.

 

In looking for a job, ask your self. \"Is this my call?\"

Ask God for guidance [이름]. Put him in your center. What ever happens, whether it is good or bad, it would be in your favor.

Happiness is a matter of choice. People keep looking for happiness, not knowing that happiness is in front of them. Hmmmm, sorry I talked too much.

And don\'t forget Philippians 4:13.

 

See you later.

-T.Naomi 

 

Today, I\'d like to write about a job.
>>Today, I\'d like to write about job.

Finding a job which I enjoy is very difficult becasue there are a lot of things what I want.

>>Finding a job which I enjoy is very difficult because there are a lot of things I want.

Depending on the person, the important thing for them is different.
>>Depending on the person, the important thing differs.

For example, Some people think that salary is the most important for them and Some people think that their value is the most important.

>>For example, Some people think that salary is the most important when it comes to having a job and some people think that their value is the most important.

For me, like others people, when I get a job I consider every things. But the the most important thing is happy.

>>For me, like other people, when I get a job I consider every things. But the the most important thing is happiness.

I mean when I am working, I should be happy. For these thing, I\'ve tried to find a thing that I enjoy. I asked these stuff to many people who have a job. Do you enjoy working in your part. Almost of all people said \"no\"

>>I mean when I am working, I should be happy. For these thing, I\'ve tried to find things that I enjoy. I asked these stuffs to many people who have a job,\"Do you enjoy working in your part?\", Almost of all people said \"no\".
But They have to do something for living. Specially, in Korea. Korea system makes this situation. Other hand, It makes Korea, too.

>>But Tthey have to do something for living specially in Korea. Korean system makes this situation. Other hand, it makes Korea, too.

I mean that Korea doesn\'t have source and big country size etc.

>>I mean that Korea doesn\'t have source and big country size etc.

However great country. So I fell into delemma.

>>However, it is a great country. So I am in a dilemma.
As a result, probably things is when I do my best for everything, I can open the door

>>As a result, probably things will go well when I do my best for everything, I can open doors.

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