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2011-03-17 · 첨삭 강사 Venus

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Hello Venus. Did you enjoy your day? Some students are playing music in my school. So, I got excited. Please correct the following composition, smart girl. I live in a villa building near Sansudong with a mom. My father and sister lives other places for their business. My house has two rooms. One is my room, another is mom's room. And my house has a bathroom and a kitchen and a living room. That house admit little light, as there are a lot of buildings. My house is just right for two people. I have a bed, desk, chair, computer in my room. Back to my bed, I have a closet. Next to my closet, I have a dressing table and next to my desk, I have a hanger. I have a lot of clothes so, I have a lot of wardrobe in my room. Thank you for reading.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]l!

Good evening! I hope you are doing great tonight! Here is now my correction on the sentences that you wrote:

I live in a villa building near Sansudong with a mom.

>> I live in a villa building near Sansudong with my mom.

My father and sister lives other places for their business.

>> My father and sister live in other places for their businesses.

My house has two rooms. One is my room, another is mom's room.

>> My house has two rooms. One is my room and the other one is my mother's.

And my house has a bathroom and a kitchen and a living room.

>>Correct

>>OR It also has a bathroom, a kitchen and a living room.

That house admit little light, as there are a lot of buildings.

>> My house admits little light as there are a lot of buildings surrounding it.

My house is just right for two people.

>>Correct

I have a bed, desk, chair, computer in my room.

>>I have a bed, a desk, a chair and a computer in my room.

Back to my bed, I have a closet. Next to my closet, I have a dressing table and next to my desk, I have a hanger.

>> I have closet near my bed and next to it is my dressing table. Beside my desk is a rack. (Hanger is the one that you use to hang garments.)

I have a lot of clothes so, I have a lot of wardrobe in my room.

>> I have many clothes so I have a lot of wardrobe in my room.


-Teacher Venus

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