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In my opinion, the traditional idea is outdated. Nowadays, many women have their job and they work very good in their field. In my case, I am housewife and office worker. While I worked in my office, I was very tired but I felt happiness. So, when I worked in my house, I thought that housework were very important. If I stay at home all day, I would have depression. Also, I think that women work very good than men. ^^

Hi [이름]! ^^ How are you today? Thank you sharing your opinion about the topic. You expressed your ideas very well since it\'s detailed. However, there are some corrections with regards to your grammar. So, study your corrections below, okay. ^^ I agree also that women work better than men. kk. Have a great day ahead and take care always! ^^   ~~Teacher Kris   In my opinion, the traditional idea is outdated. >> CorrectNowadays, many women have their job and they work very good in their field. >> Nowadays, many women have their own jobs and they work very good in their field. In my case, I am housewife and office worker. >> In my case, I am a housewife and an office worker.While I worked in my office, I was very tired but I felt happiness. >> When I work in my offcie, I will feel happines even though I am tired.So, when I worked in my house, I thought that housework were very important. >> So, when I worked in my house, I thought that housework is very important.If I stay at home all day, I would have depression. >> If I would stay at home all day, I would have depression.Also, I think that women work very good than men. ^^ >> Also, I think that women work very well than men. ^^