Hi~

2015-03-10 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

학생이 쓴 원문

Yes, the water pollution is a very serious problem in Korea. But, many people ignore that problem. It's imptotant to save water, obviously. I know that I have to save water, and use as less as possible. That's not that easy to have limit on using water. I think it's because water is very familiar to us, so many people think that using water is not that big deal. I do even act like that. We need to be aware of problems that come from overusing, not saving water.

강사 첨삭

Dear [이름],

 

Good evening! ^.^

Happy Tuesday! ^^

 

Very good! ^^,

You made a good composition.

However, you still need to observe your grammar.

 

Anyway, thanks for your sharing about your day! ^^

See you in class! ^^,

 

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

 

 

Yes, the water pollution is a very serious problem in Korea.

>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Yes, the water pollution is a very serious problem in our nation.

But, many people ignore that problem.

>> CORRECT!

>> OR: However, many people ignore it.

It\'s imptotant to save water, obviously.

>> It\'s important to save water, obviously.

I know that I have to save water, and use as less as possible.

>> I know that I have to save water and use as less as possible.

>> OR: I know that I have to save water and use it wisely.

That\'s not that easy to have limit on using water.

>> CORRECT!

I think it\'s because water is very familiar to us, so many people think that using water is not that big deal.

>> CORRECT!

I do even act like that.

>> CORRECT!

We need to be aware of problems that come from overusing, not saving water.

>> CORRECT!

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