hi!:)

Thank you for sending this in!

I am so glad to have read your homework today, Miss [이름]!

I like your sentences, but I inserted some important conjunctions to combine the short ones ;)

See you and I hope to hear your voice longer!

Teacher~ It is my diary!
>>CORRECT!
Suddenly, weather is so cold. So I always feel cold.

>>Suddenly, the weather is so cold, so I always feel chilly.

I don\'t like winter.

>>CORRECT!

I hate it! Because it makes me pain.

>>I hate it, because it makes me sick.

 If I had a lot of money. I would built my ceramic shop on warm country.

>> If I had a lot of money, I would built my ceramic shop in a warm country.

But now is reality.

>>But now it is just a dream.

Maybe I think about I eat oriental medicine.

>>I am thinking about taking Oriental medicine.

Almost my friends says \" you feel terribly cold. So you must to do exercise or eat to oriental medicine

>>Most of my friends say \" You feel terribly cold, so you must do exercise or take Oriental medicine \".

So I often to do exercise.

>>Therefore, I often workout.

 If these winter I feel terribly cold, I will eat to that.

>> If I feel terribly cold this winter, I will take that.

 I don\'t like medicine. But don\'t like winter better than oriental medicine.

>> I don\'t like medicine, but don\'t dislike the winter more.

 I am so sad.

>>CORRECT!

 Winter is soon. T.T 

>> Winter is  coming soon. T.T 

 I want to stay in my home.

>>CORRECT!

 Maybe I will have wrinkle from winter.

>> Maybe I will have wrinkle because of the winter.

oh my god. Also I;m 28 years old. oh my god!

>>Oh my god, I am also 28 years old, oh my god!

 I regretted about my time.

>> I regret about my time.

My friend says\" if I were young, I study more hard.\" But I don\'t think so.

>>My friend says\" if I were young, I would study harder\", but I don\'t think so.

If I became young, I do play more and more.

>>If I became young, I would play more and more.

 Of course, I must study more.

>>CORRECT!

But I want to play more without worry.

>>However, I want to play more without worry.