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I think you may have heard \'School Violence.\'

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According to the survey about 40% of students are scared of being a bully all the time.

>>According to a survey, about 40% of students are scared of being bullied all the time.
These days \'School Violence\' drew great attention for us.

>>These days \"School Violence\" drew a great attention to us.
And I think friendship is especially important for puils in our school because we live in dormitories.

>>And I think friendship is especially important for students in our school because we live in dormitories.
I am going to explain the seriousness of school violence by recommending the book \'Elegant lie\'.

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Reasons that I recommend this book are two.

>>The reasons why I recommend you this book are two.

OR: There are 2 reasons why I recommend you this book.
First it shows us the reality that people have no regard for us.

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And it also shows us the reality that people have no regard for others.

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I read all of books that were written by the author, 김 려령 such as \'완득이\' and ‘가시 고백.

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But \'Elegant Lie\' is the best book that I read.

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In this book, there are mom who eke out a living but is confident and her two daughters, 만지 and 천지.

>>In this book, there are moms who eke out a living but is confident and her two daughters, 만지 and 천지.
However my favorite character is \'오대오‘ who listened 천지`s trouble.

>>However my favorite character is \'오대오‘ who listened to 천지`s trouble.
Sometimes it is difficult for me to tell all of things my parents.

>>Sometimes it is very difficult for me to tell everything to my parents.