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2016-05-23 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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So she could not say all of things about her worries. Whenever 천지 went to the library, 천지 said her troubles and 오대오 just listened her story. And 천지 felt better thanks to 오대오. This book starts with the sentence,' 천지 is dead' 만지 tried to figure out the reason that 천지 and knew a shocking story. 만지 thought 화연 is 천지`s best friend but 화연 didn`t think 천지 as a friend. 화연 incorrectly informed her birthday party time or said she wanted to get a expensive MP3. And 만지 thought why 천지 didn't tell her story to her. Actually, 천지 said her worry to 만지 in many times. But 만지 didn`t bother it beacuase 만지 thought 천지`s situation was not seriou s. So 만지 regretted bitterly. In the end of story, 만지 found a note which 천지 wrote. The content was to say sorry. And also mom and two other friends found the note. But notes that 천지 wrote were 5 . Then, can you guess who is the last note`s owner. If you want to know, please read 'Elegant Lie'.

강사 첨삭

Hi there good afternoon!
Happy Monday! Thank you so much for doing great!
Take care always and have a great day!

xoxoTeacher Cam^^

So she could not say all of things about her worries.

>>So she was not able to tell her concerns.
 Whenever 천지 went to the library, 천지 said her troubles and 오대오 just listened her story.

>>Whenever 천지 goes to the library 천지 tells her troubles and 오대오 just listened to her.
 And 천지 felt better thanks to 오대오.

>>correct
This book starts with the sentence,\' 천지 is dead\' 만지 tried to figure out the reason that 천지 and knew a shocking story.

>>correct
만지 thought 화연 is 천지`s best friend but 화연 didn`t think 천지 as a friend.

>>만지 thought 화연 is 천지`s best friend but 화연 never thought 천지 her friend.
화연 incorrectly informed her birthday party time or said she wanted to get a expensive MP3.

>>화연 incorrectly informed her the time of her birthday party or said she wanted to get an expensive MP3.
 And 만지 thought why 천지 didn\'t tell her story to her.

>>And 만지 thought why 천지 didn\'t tell her the story.
 Actually, 천지 said her worry to 만지 in many times.

>>Actually, 천지 shared her worries/concerns to 만지 many times.
 But 만지 didn`t bother it beacuase 만지 thought 천지`s situation was not serious.

>>correct
 So 만지 regretted bitterly.

>>correct

In the end of story, 만지 found a note which 천지 wrote.

>>correct

The content was to say sorry.

>>correct
 And also mom and two other friends found the note.

>>correct
 But notes that 천지 wrote were 5.

>>correct

Then, can you guess who is the last note`s owner.

>>correct
 If you want to know, please read \'Elegant Lie\'.

>>If you want to know, please read the Elegant Lie.

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