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2011-08-16 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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Hi,Marie! Did you have a nice weekend? Last Friday, I played a screen golf with my co-workers. Do you know a screen golf? Screen golf is popular in Korea. I have wanted to play screen golf since a long time ago. It's a difficult but it's a interesting. I will go a screen golf Tomorrow evening with my husband. Enjoy the holiday to your heart's content. Bye.

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Hello Ms. [이름]! Hmm... I've never heard of screen golf before. It sounds interesting. I will look it up on the Internet. Or maybe you can tell me more about it in our next class. :D Anyway, I had a great weekend! I enjoyed hanging out with my family and friends. I hope you did too. Great composition by the way!  Take care and enjoy your day! CIAO! ~T.Marie~   Hi,Marie! >>correctDid you have a nice weekend? >>correctLast Friday, I played a screen golf with my co-workers. >>correctDo you know a screen golf? >>correct >> Do you know screen golf? -betterScreen golf is popular in Korea. >>correctI have wanted to play screen golf since a long time ago. >> I've been wanting to play screen golf for a long time now.It's a difficult but it's a interesting. >> It's difficult but it's interesting.I will go a screen golf Tomorrow evening with my husband. >> I will go play screen golf tomorrow with my husband.Enjoy the holiday to your heart's content. >>correct **Great expression here! Wow. I'm impressed. Bye. >>correct

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