Hi!

2018-05-24 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

학생이 쓴 원문

Do you like meeting new people? Yes, I really love to meet new people all around the world. When I meet new people, I can learn new interpersonal skill. I think I am a person who can accept all kinds of people, I believe when I understand their perspective, I would be happy for the rest of my time. In addition, especially to being a cabin crew, we should not have prejudice to other people, it can be breed discrimination.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Aileen!


Thank you for sending your homework.


Cheers!

Jean



ESSAY: Do you like meeting new people? 

Yes, I really love to meet new people all around the world.

>> CORRECT


 When I meet new people, I can learn new interpersonal skill.

>> CORRECT


 I think I am a person who can accept all kinds of people, I believe when I understand their perspective, I would be happy for the rest of my time. 

>> I think I\'m a person who can accept and mingle with all kinds of people. I believe I would be happy when I understand their perspective.


 In addition, especially to being a cabin crew, we should not have prejudice to other people, it can be breed discrimination.

>> In addition, especially for cabin crews, we should not have prejudice to other people as it can breed discrimination.



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