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2018-07-27 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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I believe that cabin crew should be collaborate with colleagues but also should be indepentdent. If I become a Qatar Airways's cabin crew I should live away from my family and friends. So, We have to overcome our homesickness by ourselves. It's not only for cabin crew. I believe our life is alone. we should overcome our difficulties and should solve what life gives us by ourselves. In addition, we need to accept other people's opinions but we should have our own subjective. For me, Indenpendent meaning is having my own character, my belief, acknowledging me. If so, I could uild a healthy relationship with people.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sujin,

Thank you!

Have a nice day and a great weekend!

Teacher ELLY.

I believe that cabin crew should be collaborate with colleagues but also should be indepentdent.

>>I believe that cabin crews should collaborate with their colleagues, but should also be independent.

If I become a Qatar Airways\'s cabin crew I should live away from my family and friends.

>>If I become a Qatar Airways cabin crew, I need to live far from my family and friends.

or>>If I become one of the cabin crews at Qatar Airways, I have to live on my own, far from my family and friends.

So, We have to overcome our homesickness by ourselves.

>>So, we have to overcome the homesickness on our own.

It\'s not only for cabin crew. I believe our life is alone.

>>This does not not only for cabin crews. I believe that each person lives alone in this life.

We should overcome our difficulties and should solve what life gives us by ourselves.

CORRECT!

or>>Each should overcome his or her own difficulties in life, and should solve life’s problems on his or her own.

In addition, we need to accept other people\'s opinions but we should have our own subjective.

>>In addition, we need to accept other people\'s opinions but we should be subjective about it.

For me, Indenpendent meaning is having my own character, my belief, acknowledging me.

>>For me, the meaning of being independent is having my own character and my beliefs, and that I acknowledge my own self-worth.

If so, I could build a healthy relationship with people.

CORRECT!

or>>Therefore, I can have a healthy relationship with other people.

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