Hi~!

2018-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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<Coffee> I love to drink coffee every day. especially, Ice Americano is the one of the beverages what I am really into. It is low in calories so I can drink without worry about fat. and I also heard that moderate amount of coffee helps us to relax our stress and prevent our heart disease. So, I recommend people to have and enjoy coffee properly and moderately. We should eat all things in moderation for good health.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sujin,

Thank you!

Please keep up the good work!

Have a great Monday!

Teacher ELLY.

I love to drink coffee every day.

CORRECT!

or>>I enjoy drinking coffee on a daily basis.

especially, Ice Americano is the one of the beverages what I am really into.

>>Especially, Ice Americano is one of the beverages that I am really into.

It is low in calories so I can drink without worry about fat.

>>It is low in calories so I can drink without worrying about fat.

and I also heard that moderate amount of coffee helps us to relax our stress and prevent our heart disease.

>>And, I also heard that a moderate amount of coffee helps us relax from stress and prevent heart diseases.

So, I recommend people to have and enjoy coffee properly and moderately.

>>So, I recommend for people to have and enjoy coffee properly and moderately.

We should eat all things in moderation for good health. 

>>We should eat and drink everything in moderation for our health. 

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