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2018-12-04 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

학생이 쓴 원문

These days many korean teenagers or young people in early twenties work. Teacher talked to me that filipino people who are graduated school start work so early. I think its not very good. But it has also advantages. They can experience social activity so early, and they can learn responsibility. But on the other hand , that situation deprice them of freedom. Its a little bit sad. When im early twenties, i just did some part time job. And i traveld and hung out with my friends. However these days people are independent, They enjoy their freedom while working. i think filipino teenager or early twenties are so great and awesome, even if its because of differences in education system.

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These days many korean teenagers or young people in early twenties work. Teacher talked to me that filipino people who are graduated school start work so early.

>> These days, many Korean teenagers or young people in their early twenties work. You talked to me about Filipino people graduate from university and start working so early.
 I think its not very good. But it has also advantages. They can experience social activity so early, and they can learn responsibility. But on the other hand , that situation deprice them of freedom. Its a little bit sad. When im early twenties, i just did some part time job. And i traveld and hung out with my friends.

>> I think it\'s not very good but it also has an advantage. They can experience social activity early and learn about responsibility. On the other hand, this situation deprives them of freedom. It\'s a little bit sad. When I was in my early twenties, I did some part time jobs and I traveled and hung out with my friends.
 However these days people are independent, They enjoy their freedom while working.

>> However, these days, people are independent, they enjoy their freedom while working.
 i think filipino teenager or early twenties are so great and awesome, even if its because of differences in education system.

>> I think Filipino teenagers or those in their early twenties are great and awesome even if it\'s because of education system differences.

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