Hi
학생이 쓴 원문
Wow ~~
my compositions in Enlish was delayed !!!
NoNoNo I don't have to this ...
ah ~~~ my wasn't controlled myself
my body have went the absolutely different way in my mind
I try to have a strong mind but I'm physically weak
when I stayed over midnight for a few days,
I couldn't open my eyes. I feel tired
My health has been failing as a result of continued overwork
so I am anxious about my health
I talked to my co-worker about that
thus, she who suffers from her disease suggested that I should consult the doctor and emphasized on prevention of a disease
I recently realized that health is the most precious of all
Nothing is more precious than health
and Thanks God to walk, hear, talk, see, eat... in normal
I hope to stay healthy until death
강사 첨삭
[이름],Hi there! I am so sorry to hear that you’ve been over working these past few days. Yeah, I noticed that you sounded a bit exhausted during our early morning classes. You are perfectly right! Health is the most important thing above all. Because, if we are not healthy then we wouldn’t be able to enjoy our life! So stay healthy always!
XOXO, Jenny
Wow ~~my compositions in Enlish was delayed !!!
>> Wow! My English composition was delayed!NoNoNo I don't have to this ...
>> I don’t have to do this. ah ~~~ my wasn't controlled myself
>>Ah! I wasn’t able to control myself.
my body have went the absolutely different way in my mind
>>My body wants to do something different from what my mind wants it to do.I try to have a strong mind but I'm physically weak
>> Correct.when I stayed over midnight for a few days, I couldn't open my eyes.
>>When I stayed up over midnight for the past few days, I couldn’t open my eyes.I feel tired
>> Correct. My health has been failing as a result of continued overwork
>> My health has been failing as a result of continues overwork.so I am anxious about my health
>>So, I am anxious about my health.I talked to my co-worker about that
>>I talked to my co-worker about that.thus, she who suffers from her disease suggested that I should consult the doctor and emphasized on prevention of a disease
>> Thus, one of them who suffered from a disease suggested that I should consult the doctor and emphasized on the prevention of the disease.I recently realized that health is the most precious of all
>>Correct.Nothing is more precious than health.
>>Correct.and Thanks God to walk, hear, talk, see, eat... in normal
>>And I thank God that I can walk, hear, talk, see and eat normally.I hope to stay healthy until death
>> I hope to stay healthy until I die.
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