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Should parents make plans for their children, or should they give liberty to their children to plan their own lives?
Giving liberty to my children looks like it is very great thing. But as a parent, I might be disappointed from them very easy. Because recently, my children likes playing computer games or smart phone games. If I don\'t plan for them, they would spend daily away the time. So we have to set many rules for them. And for their future, they have to read many books. As much as how many books do they read, their dream will bigger than now.
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Hi [이름],
A pleasant Monday morning to you. Thank you for diligently working on your homework despite your busy schedule. I agree with the fact that as parents, we should makes plans for the children to help them in their future goals. Maybe, if they are old enough to decide for themselves and mature enough to make choices, that\'s when we can let them do things independently.
-Rachel
Giving liberty to my children looks like it is very great thing.
>> correct
But as a parent, I might be disappointed from them very easy.
>> But as a parent, I might get disappointed with them easily.
Because recently, my children likes playing computer games or smart phone games.
>> correct
If I don\'t plan for them, they would spend daily away the time.
>> If I don\'t plan for them. they might spend their daily time unwisely. or They might waste their daily time away.
So we have to set many rules for them. And for their future, they have to read many books.
>> correct
As much as how many books do they read, their dream will bigger than now.
>> Their dreams will get bigger as much as they read books to enhance their knowledge.
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