Hi, Ally!

2018-11-07 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Fill in the blank: If I could invent anything, I would invent ______________________ because_______________________. If I could invent something, I would like to invent a new drug that would comfortably end the world. because,I was heartbroken to see the old people around me die painfully for a long time.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!


Thank you for sending a composition.

I hope you\'re doing well.

I am so touched to read what you wrote.

Not a lot of people notice the struggles of others,

so it\'s very kind of you to see it.

I wish someday someone actually invents that drug.



~~t. Ally



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If I could invent something, I would like to invent a new drug that would comfortably end the world.

>> If I could invent something, I would like to invent a new drug that would allow dying people to leave this world comfortably.


because,I was heartbroken to see the old people around me die painfully for a long time.

>> Because I always get heartbroken whenever I see old people around me die painfully for a prolonged period of time.

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