Hi, Ally!

2018-11-30 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

학생이 쓴 원문

Answer this question in 5 sentences: Tell me about your happiest birthday memory. In the past, our country was poor so we hardly had a birthday party. There was only enough rice for my birthday and there was no such thing as a birthday present. In addition, Korean and other Chinese cultures celebrate their 60th birthday the most because they have lived for a long time in spite of short life span. In recent years, South Korea will not have a big event until its 80th birthday. Since this year is my 60th birthday, I had many events with my family and friends.

강사 첨삭

Belated happy birthday Sir Son!]

I\'m glad to hear you\'ve lived a good, long life.

I hope you get to live a lot more heartwarming years! ^^

~~t. Ally

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In the past, our country was poor so we hardly had a birthday party.

>> CORRECT!

There was only enough rice for my birthday and there was no such thing as a birthday present.
>> CORRECT!

In addition, Korean and other Chinese cultures celebrate their 60th birthday the most because they have lived for a long time in spite of short life span.
>> In addition to that, Koreans and other Chinese cultures celebrate their 60th birthday the most because they have lived for a long time in spite of the short life expectancy.

In recent years, South Korea will not have a big event until its 80th birthday.
>> In recent years, South Koreans don\'t have a big event until they turn 80.

Since this year is my 60th birthday, I had many events with my family and friends.

>> Since this year is my 60th birthday, I have had many events with my family and friends.

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