Hi, Ally!

2019-03-19 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Answer this question in 5 sentences: What is the biggest problem in Korea nowadays? In my opinion, our country is urgent and dynamic every day. Korea is the most unstable in the world military, but the security of society is stable. The economy has developed in a short time, but I think the side effect has also been great. Now, the imbalance of wealth and the redistribution of wealth are becoming the biggest issues, and the problems of youth unemployment, aging and low fertility rate are the most serious.

강사 첨삭

Hi Son!

Thank you for the factual composition. ^^

I hope Korea rises back to its former glory soon!

~~t. Ally

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In my opinion, our country is urgent and dynamic every day.

>> CORRECT!

Korea is the most unstable in the world military, but the security of society is stable.

>> Korea has the most unstable military force in the world, but the security in our society is quite stable.

The economy has developed in a short time, but I think the side effect has also been great.

>> CORRECT!

Now, the imbalance of wealth and the redistribution of wealth are becoming the biggest issues, and the problems of youth unemployment, aging and low fertility rate are the most serious.

>> CORRECT!

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