Hi, Ally!

2019-04-02 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Answer this question in not more than 6 sentences: If a genie suddenly showed up and said he would grant you three wishes, what would you wish for? Why? First, I will ask for the health of our family, because health is the most basic of the world. Secondly, I want to have a little bit of money, because money is a means of pursuing happiness these days and can help others. Lastly, I want to unify our country, because the tensions of the two Koreas are relaxing and I want to live peacefully.

강사 첨삭

These are wonderful wishes, Son! ^^

Thank you for sharing them with me.

I hope you truly live a peaceful and harmonious life.

~~t. Ally

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First, I will ask for the health of our family, because health is the most basic of the world.

>> First, I will ask for the good health of our family, because health is the most basic and important thing in the world.

Secondly, I want to have a little bit of money, because money is a means of pursuing happiness these days and can help others.

>> Secondly, I want to have a little bit of money, because money is a means of pursuing happiness these days and it can help others.

Lastly, I want to unify our country, because the tensions of the two Koreas are relaxing and I want to live peacefully.

>> CORRECT!

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