Hi, Ally!

2019-04-15 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY Answer the question in 5 Senses: Do you think fast food, soda and sweets soul be cold in school catheters? Why? In our country, fast food, soda, and coke are not sold in school stores. I agree, fast food and foods that contain excess sugar cause students to become obese. However, students are tame to these foods, so our school sells snacks, breads, ionic beverages, stationery, etc. at school stores to supplement the nutrients needed for growth.

강사 첨삭

Hi Son!

Happy Monday. ^^

That is very good!

I do hope that schools in Korea continue this.

~~t. Ally

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In our country, fast food, soda, and coke are not sold in school stores.

>> In our country, fast food and soda are not sold in school cafeterias. (Coke is a kind of soda.)

I agree, fast food and foods that contain excess sugar cause students to become obese.

>> CORRECT!

However, students are tame to these foods, so our school sells snacks, breads, ionic beverages, stationery, etc. at school stores to supplement the nutrients needed for growth.

>> However, students are used to eating these foods, so our school cafeteria sells snacks, breads, ionic beverages and other things to supplement the nutrients needed for their growth.

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