Hi, Ally!
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Yes, I agree with your answer, Son!
Staying positive is a very wonderful thing!^^
And it is also true that stimulating your brain is the best way to learn something new. ^^
~~t.Ally
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I think that positive attitude is most important when everyone wants to learn something new.
>> I think that a positive attitude is the most important thing to have when someone wants to learn something new.
Especially I try hard to learn how to use smartphone these days, but I feel it is very difficult.
>> Especially for me, I try hard to learn how to use smartphones these days, but I feel that it is very difficult.
So I think it is necessary to make interesting and steady efforts to learn something new.
>> CORRECT!
Especially as you get older, new learning is not only beneficial to your mental health but also your physical health.
>> As we get older, learning new things is beneficial not only for our mental health, but also for our physical health.
So I try to learn new things that need brains such as smartphones as well as languages.
>> So I try to learn new things that require brain stimulation, such as smartphones, as well as new languages.
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