Hi, Ally!

2019-04-26 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Answer the question in 5 Senses: How do you handle stress in a good way? I think it is very important to deal with stress well in the world. It would be different for each person to relieve stress, to exercise, to drive, to eat delicious food, to drink. I usually relieve stress by drinking alcohol after exercising. During we live in the world, we are constantly facing stress, but I think we need to find a own way to resolve it in our own good way.

강사 첨삭

Hi there!

Thank you so much for sending a composition. ^^

I enjoyed reading this.

I hope you are able to deal with stress properly.

Great job!

~~t. Ally

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I think it is very important to deal with stress well in the world.

>> I think it is very important to deal with all the stress in the world in a good manner.

It would be different for each person to relieve stress, to exercise, to drive, to eat delicious food, to drink.

>> Relieving stress for each person may differ. Some people try to exercise, some try to drive, some try to eat delicious food and others try to drink.

I usually relieve stress by drinking alcohol after exercising.

>> CORRECT!

During we live in the world, we are constantly facing stress, but I think we need to find a own way to resolve it in our own good way.

>> While we live in this world, we are constantly facing lots of stress. But I think we need to find our own way on how we can resolve it properly.

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