Hi\' Ally!
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi, Son!
This is a wonderful law. ^^
Teachers deserve to be respected and listened to, and empowering them will serve as a door to a more effective educational system. ^^
~~t. Ally
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If I should win the election and become a plastician, the first law I will implement is to raise the authority and rights of teachers.
>> If I could win the election and become a politician, the first law I will implement is to raise the authority and the rights of teachers.
These days, in Korea, the rights of young students are strengthened and behave in school too spoiled.
>> These days, in Korea, the rights of young students are strengthened and in turn, they behave in school in a spoiled manner.
So in school, teachers worry a lot because school education is not working properly.
>> CORRECT!
I want to create a law that empowers teachers to make a spoiled student a polite student.
>> I want to create a law that empowers teachers to have the right to guide spoiled students into becoming more polite.
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