Hi, Ally!

2019-05-21 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK: What are the possible effects of cigarette addiction to a person\'s health and wellbeing? List down 3, and explain each briefly. There is a saying that smoking has a hundred harms and that there is no one benefit. But I think smoking sometimes relieves stress. Many people do not smoke these days, and people who smoke stoped also smoking. I think cigarettes should not be begun since they were young.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Son!

That\'s true. ^^
I think people like smoking because it makes them feel relaxed.
It relieves all their exhaustion when they\'re tired from work.
But sadly, the problem is that there are more negative effects than positive ones.

~~t. Ally

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There is a saying that smoking has a hundred harms and that there is no one benefit.
>> There is a saying that smoking has a hundred harmful effects and zero benefits.

But I think smoking sometimes relieves stress.
>> CORRECT!

Many people do not smoke these days, and people who smoke stoped also smoking.
>> Many people don\'t smoke these days, and people who used to smoke have now stopped.

I think cigarettes should not be begun since they were young.
>> I think the habit of smoking cigarettes should not begin at such a young age.

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