Hi, Ally!

2019-05-31 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK: Answer this in 5-8 senses: What is your opening on the growing risk of HIV/AIDS all around the world?How do you think can this be prevented? I think HIV/AIDS is the punishment God has given to man. I think a new cure will come after God\'s punishment for human greed and sexual disorder. As an optimist who believes and supports science, I am sure that therapies will be developed. People have to come up with solutions if they need them, but they will take some time. I think that this kind of disease will occur more often in the future, so that people should be polite and humble in front of God and nature.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Son!

This is so true.

People need to be more careful of all the things they do.

I do hope so too!

This is a very big issue all over the world.

~~t. Ally

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I think HIV/AIDS is the punishment God has given to man.
>> I think HIV/AIDS is the punishment God has given to mankind.

I think a new cure will come after God\'s punishment for human greed and sexual disorder.
>> I think a new cure will come after God\'s punishment for human greed and sexual disorder ends.

As an optimist who believes and supports science, I am sure that therapies will be developed.
>> CORRECT!

People have to come up with solutions if they need them, but they will take some time.

>> CORRECT!

I think that this kind of disease will occur more often in the future, so that people should be polite and humble in front of God and nature.

>> I think that this kind of disease will occur more often in the future, so that people would be more polite and humble in front of God and nature.

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