Hi, Ally!

2019-06-24 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK: Fill in the blank: I think the best way to help the poor is to arrange a job so that they can self-reliant when they can still work. If they are elderly or sick who can not work to become independent, the state should protect them in protective facilities, or protect them at home with responsibility,

강사 첨삭

Hi, Son!

That\'s a wonderful solution!

I wish all countries cared about their people.

They all deserve the chance to have a better shot at life. ^^

~~t. Ally

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I think the best way to help the poor is to arrange a job so that they can self-reliant when they can still work.

>> I think the best way to help the poor is to arrange job opportunities for them so that they can be self-reliant while they can still work.

If they are elderly or sick who can not work to become independent, the state should protect them in protective facilities, or protect them at home with responsibility,

>> If they are elderly or sick who cannot work to become independent, the state should protect them in protective facilities, or protect them in homes with responsible care- givers.

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