Hi, Ally!
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi, Son!
I completely agree with you!
The world lives and breathes because of the internet nowadays.
But we also need to live without it so that we can finally look away from our computers and phones, and see the real world.^^
~~t. Ally
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Old people will not be very frustrated.
>> CORRECT!
But young people will be suffocated.
>> CORRECT!
And the whole world will be connected to the computer network, and panic will come.
>> And the whole world who are essentially connected by the computer network will panic, and chaos will ensue.
Especially today, all financial transactions are connected to the Internet, and if the computer network is confused, the world will have an unimaginable mental collapse.
>> CORRECT!
On the other hand, I think we could have a really comfortable day.
>> CORRECT!
It’s also a way to make the day comfortable for people around the world, from the painful routine.
>> CORRECT!
In conclusion, there\\\'s chaos on the one hand, On the other hand, I think it can bring gratitude to the Internet and a day\\\'s rest.
>> In conclusion, there\'s chaos on the one hand, and on the other hand, I think it can bring people to be grateful for the internet and a day\'s rest.
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