Hi, Ally!

2019-08-07 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

학생이 쓴 원문

HOMEWORK: Are young people generally more selfish than their parents and grandparents? Why or why not? I agree with the above subject. I think most young people these days are more selfish than the past, lacking consideration, and self-centered. I have seen that students’ selfish behavior gets worse over time because I have been working at school for a long time. For example, nowadays, I think that friends have been disconnected from each other in school because of mobile phones, and the contribution of mobile phones is the highest. I think we should teach young people to have more time for conversation at home or at school.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Son. ^^

Thank you for this composition!

I agree with it.

Please continue creating more beautifully composed sentences.

I really enjoy reading them!

~T. Ally

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I agree with the above subject.

>> CORRECT!

I think most young people these days are more selfish than the past, lacking consideration, and self-centered.

>> I think most young people these days are more selfish than the past, they lack consideration, and are self-centered.

I have seen that students’ selfish behavior gets worse over time because I have been working at school for a long time.

>> I have seen that students\' selfish behaviors get worse over time because I have been working at a school for a long time now. (continuous, because you are still working at a school)

For example, nowadays, I think that friends have been disconnected from each other in school because of mobile phones, and the contribution of mobile phones is the highest.

>> CORRECT!

I think we should teach young people to have more time for conversation at home or at school.

>> CORRECT!

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