Hi! Ally.

2019-08-21 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Should people of between 50 and 55 be forced to retire from their jobs in order to make way for younger workers? Why or why not? In Korea, workers usually retire at the age of 60, but the trend is extending the age of retirement. Perhaps, the main reason is the increase in average life expectancy and the lack of workers due to low fertility rates. However, unemployment for high-educated workers is serious in Korea, but there are not many workers in the 3D industry, so many foreign workers are filling in and continuing to extend their retirement age. In addition, the youth unemployment rate is serious because Korean young people do not want to work in 3D industries. In Korea, seniors are easy to find jobs, but young people will have to work, get married, and have children.

강사 첨삭

Hi, sir Son. ^^


Yea, I\'ve also heard about this issue in Korea nowadays.

Thank you so much for sharing this with me.

Your compositions are always so interesting to read. ^^



~~t. Ally



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In Korea, workers usually retire at the age of 60, but the trend is extending the age of retirement.

>> CORRECT!


 Perhaps, the main reason is the increase in average life expectancy and the lack of workers
due to low fertility rates.

>> CORRECT!


However, unemployment for high-educated workers is serious in Korea, but there are not many workers in the 3D industry, so many foreign workers are filling in and continuing to extend their retirement age.

>> CORRECT!


 In addition, the youth unemployment rate is serious because Korean young people do not want to work in 3D industries.

>> CORRECT!


 In Korea, seniors are easy to find jobs, but young people will have to work, get married, and have children.

>> In Korea, it\'s easy for seniors to find jobs, but young people will have to work, get married and have children.

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