Hi! Ally.
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi, sir Son~
I agree with your composition. ^^
But like you said, it\'s everything in moderation.
I hope your health is getting better.
Diabetes and hypertension are very difficult to control. :(
~t. Ally
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I think dieting is useful for us.
>> CORRECT!
Doctors treat various patients using diets, and we manage our own health through diet.
>> Doctors treat various patients using diets, and we manage our own health through it.
Diets can reduce weight, sometimes strengthen muscles, and diabetics can control sugar.
>> Diets can reduce weight, sometimes strengthen muscles, and diabetics can use it to control their sugar consumption.
We need to be careful about weight loss and treatment using excessive diet.
>> We need to be careful about using excessive diet as a way to have some weight loss and as a treatment.
I am dieting for diabetes and hypertension treatment, and I also promote a lot around me.
>> I am dieting for my diabetes and hypertension treatment, and I also promote this to a lot of people around me.
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