Hi! Ally.

2019-08-26 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Do you think diets are useful or not? I think dieting is useful for us. Doctors treat various patients using diets, and we manage our own health through diet. Diets can reduce weight, sometimes strengthen muscles, and diabetics can control sugar. We need to be careful about weight loss and treatment using excessive diet. I am dieting for diabetes and hypertension treatment, and I also promote a lot around me.

강사 첨삭

Hi, sir Son~


I agree with your composition. ^^

But like you said, it\'s everything in moderation.

I hope your health is getting better.

Diabetes and hypertension are very difficult to control. :(


~t. Ally


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 I think dieting is useful for us.

>> CORRECT!


 Doctors treat various patients using diets, and we manage our own health through diet.

>> Doctors treat various patients using diets, and we manage our own health through it.


 Diets can reduce weight, sometimes strengthen muscles, and diabetics can control sugar.

>> Diets can reduce weight, sometimes strengthen muscles, and diabetics can use it to control their sugar consumption.


 We need to be careful about weight loss and treatment using excessive diet.

>> We need to be careful about using excessive diet as a way to have some weight loss and as a treatment.


 I am dieting for diabetes and hypertension treatment, and I also promote a lot around me.

>> I am dieting for my diabetes and hypertension treatment, and I also promote this to a lot of people around me.

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