Hi! Ally.

2019-09-03 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

학생이 쓴 원문

HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Is religion important to you? Why or why not? In short, religion is not important to me. I read an essay titled \"Three Religious Stories \"this summer. The three religions that started in Abraham are Judaism, Catholicism and Islam, and also about the differences and history of religious development in three religions. I think religion should give peace to mankind and save humanity, but in our country, some religions are a means of business and cause many social problems. And historically, religion has caused many conflicts, so I think religion is not important to me yet, but .no one knows the future.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Son! ^^


I agree.

In my case, I believe that faith is more important than religion.

We also have the same issue in the Philippines. 

Thank you for such an insightful composition! ^^


~t. Ally



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In short, religion is not important to me.

>> CORRECT!


 I read an essay titled \"Three Religious Stories \"this summer.

>> I read an essay entitled \"Three Religious Stories \"this summer.


 The three religions that started in Abraham are Judaism, Catholicism and Islam, and also about the differences and history of religious development in three religions.

>> It talks about the three religions that started from Abraham, which are Judaism, Catholicism and Islam, and it also talks about the differences and history of religious development among the three religions.


 I think religion should give peace to mankind and save humanity, but in our country, some religions are a means of business and cause many social problems.

>> CORRECT!


 And historically, religion has caused many conflicts, so I think religion is not important to me yet, but .no one knows the future.

>>  And historically, religion has caused many conflicts, so I think religion is not important to me yet, but only time will tell.

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