Hi, Ally!

2019-09-06 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: How can using social networking sites invade your privacy? Give a sample situation. Now sns is also one media, so the content of sns is shared by everyone. The personal content what my friend sent to me is a matter between us, but my sensitive privacy is open to other friends who share the contents together. I do not have this experience directly, but I get a lot of sensitive secrets from my friends through sns. I think that human beings have a shame that everyone wants to hide, so use of sns should be very careful. I think sns and comments must be educated at home or at school.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Son!


That\'s a really nice composition.

I agree with you.

Especially nowadays, people are addicted to social media.

It\'s quite alarming how many secrets get passed around because the internet.

So I think educating people about the proper use of SNS is very important. ^^



~ t. Ally



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 Now sns is also one media, so the content of sns is shared by everyone.

>> Now SNS is also considered as a form of social media, so the contents are shared by everyone.


 The personal content what my friend sent to me is a matter between us, but my sensitive privacy is open to other friends who share the contents together.

>> The personal content that my friend sent to me is a matter between us, but my sensitive privacy is open to other friends who share the contents together.


 I do not have this experience directly, but I get a lot of sensitive secrets from my friends through sns.

>> CORRECT!


 I think that human beings have a shame that everyone wants to hide, so use of sns should be very careful.

>> I think that human beings have things to be ashamed about and keep hidden to everyone, so we should be very careful in using SNS.


 I think sns and comments must be educated at home or at school.

>> I think SNS and commenting must be explained well at home or at school.

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