Hi, Ally!
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi, Son!
That\'s a really nice composition.
I agree with you.
Especially nowadays, people are addicted to social media.
It\'s quite alarming how many secrets get passed around because the internet.
So I think educating people about the proper use of SNS is very important. ^^
~ t. Ally
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Now sns is also one media, so the content of sns is shared by everyone.
>> Now SNS is also considered as a form of social media, so the contents are shared by everyone.
The personal content what my friend sent to me is a matter between us, but my sensitive privacy is open to other friends who share the contents together.
>> The personal content that my friend sent to me is a matter between us, but my sensitive privacy is open to other friends who share the contents together.
I do not have this experience directly, but I get a lot of sensitive secrets from my friends through sns.
>> CORRECT!
I think that human beings have a shame that everyone wants to hide, so use of sns should be very careful.
>> I think that human beings have things to be ashamed about and keep hidden to everyone, so we should be very careful in using SNS.
I think sns and comments must be educated at home or at school.
>> I think SNS and commenting must be explained well at home or at school.
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