Hi! Ally.

2019-09-10 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: What is the most dangerous thing in your home for an elderly person? How can it be made less dangerous? My father, who is old and uncomfortable in my hometown, lives alone, so I spend the weekend almost taking care of my father in my hometown. I think the most dangerous thing for an old man at home is being alone, because loneliness is the most scary. In Korea, there are many elderly people living alone, so the indoors are conveniently constructed at home. And during the week, care workers visit every day to manage the elderly. I think it is better for the elderly to spend their old age without being lonely by making a lot of silver towns with good environment, whether it is made by a countries or an individuals.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Son. ^^

This is true.

I think it is common nowadays for people to leave the elderly alone.

It is quite sad.

But I think you are a very nice son to your father. ^^

You take care of your father as much as you can, and I\'m sure he\'s very proud of you!

~t. Ally

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My father, who is old and uncomfortable in my hometown, lives alone, so I spend the weekend almost taking care of my father in my hometown.

>> CORRECT!

I think the most dangerous thing for an old man at home is being alone, because loneliness is the most scary.

>> CORRECT!

In Korea, there are many elderly people living alone, so the indoors are conveniently constructed at home.

>> In Korea, there are many elderly people living alone, so their home\'s interiors are conveniently constructed.

And during the week, care workers visit every day to manage the elderly.

>> And during the week, care-takers visit daily to manage the elderly.

I think it is better for the elderly to spend their old age without being lonely by making a lot of silver towns with good environment, whether it is made by a countries or an individuals.

>> I think it is better for the elderly to spend their old age without being lonely, this can happen by making a lot of silver towns with good environment, whether it is made by countries or individuals.

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