Hi! Ally.

2019-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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What two things could you not do when you were a child, but you can do now? There are a lot of things that can not be done when you are young, but there are many things you can do now. The first is that I can travel by saving time and money, which was impossible as a child due to academic and economic problems, but now I can. The second is that you can make decisions on a problem yourself, when you were a child, you had to follow the decisions of adults, but now you can make your own decisions. But when you become an adult, you have to decide everything and be free, but keep in mind that the responsibility is always great.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, sir Son!

These are pretty good! ^^

I think you are always so quick witted.

I really like that about you. ^^

Please continue this consistency in making your compositions.

~t. Ally

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There are a lot of things that can not be done when you are young, but there are many things you can do now.

>> CORRECT!

The first is that I can travel by saving time and money, which was impossible as a child due to academic and economic problems, but now I can.

>> The first one would be being able to travel while saving time and money, which was impossible as a child due to academic and economic problems.

The second is that you can make decisions on a problem yourself, when you were a child, you had to follow the decisions of adults, but now you can make your own decisions.

>> The second is being able to make your own decisions about a problem, as a child, you had to follow the decisions of adults.

But when you become an adult, you have to decide everything and be free, but keep in mind that the responsibility is always great.

>> Becoming an adult means you have to decide on everything and be free, but keep in mind that the responsibility is always great.

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