Hi! Ally>
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I agree with you. ^^
It\'s also the same thing in the Philippines.
Gender equality has been an issue since the beginning of time.
In the future, there is hope for a better world.
Where people are nicer and more respectful. ^^
~t. Ally
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Gays think they are discriminated against in any way because they are different from the general public.
>> CORRECT!
We have a habit to discriminate against something different from us.
>> We have a habit of discriminating against something or someone who is different from us.
Especially, I think that gays have been narrowed down in our society since ancient times, so they are still discriminated against even if they are protected by law.
>> I especially think that gays have been narrowed down in our society since ancient times, so they are still discriminated against even if they are protected by the law.
In the future, I hope that minority will be respected without discrimination.
>> In the future, I hope that the minority will be respected without discrimination.
Especially, it will take a lot of time for gays to become undifferentiated societies in traditional Confucian countries like Korea.
>> It will take a lot of time for gays to become undifferentiated, especially in societies and countries that live in a traditional Confucian traditions, like Korea.
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