Hi! Ally.

2019-10-22 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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Do you have any goals that you feel are unrealistic? Tell me about it. Use 5-10 sentences. Perhaps everyone has a dream that is difficult to achieve from a young age. I have a dream of traveling around the world after retirement, I think it will be a little bit, but it will be difficult to complete. I think that if you have a big goal, you can achieve some even if you do not get it completely done. I am studying English conversation now, but I think that health and economic power should be supported to travel around the world. I think that if my health is allowed and I have friends to accompany, I can travel around the world, but I have not found a friend who matches my thoughts yet. I think it is possible for anyone to achieve their goals when they are matched by luck, effort, and the help around them.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Son. ^^


Thank you for sharing this.

I think travelling the world is a really good idea.

You can make these come true! ^^


~t. Ally




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Perhaps everyone has a dream that is difficult to achieve from a young age.

>> CORRECT!


 I have a dream of traveling around the world after retirement, I think it will be a little bit, but it will be difficult to complete.

>> I have a dream of traveling around the world after retirement, but it will be difficult to complete.


 I think that if you have a big goal, you can achieve some even if you do not get it completely done.

>>CORRECT!


 I am studying English conversation now, but I think that health and economic power should be supported to travel around the world.

>>  I am studying English conversation now, but I think that my health and economic power should be well supported for me to travel around the world.


 I think that if my health is allowed and I have friends to accompany, I can travel around the world, but I have not found a friend who matches my thoughts yet.

>>  I think that if my health permits it and I have friends to accompany me, I can travel around the world, but I have not found a friend who matches my thoughts yet.


 I think it is possible for anyone to achieve their goals when they are matched by luck, effort, and the help around them.

>> CORRECT!

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