Hi! Ally.

2019-11-07 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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If you had more free time, what would you do with it? If I have more free time, I want to read a lot of historical books. I majored in chemistry at college, but as I get older, I become more interested in history and read a lot of history-related books. I am interested in the history of our country, but I am interested in how the civilization of the world has developed and how religion has been born and developed. I read historical books and learned the origin of the name of the Philippines, the Spanish and USA domination of the Philippines, the death of Magellan, and so on. I think it\'s really fun to study history.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Son!


Thank you for sharing opinion regarding this composition. ^^

I\'m amazed that you have a lot of interest about history.

Keep it up!



~t. Ally



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If I have more free time, I want to read a lot of historical books.

>> CORRECT!


 I majored in chemistry at college, but as I get older, I become more interested in history and read a lot of history-related books.

>> I majored in chemistry when I was in college, but as I got older, I became more interested in history and I read a lot of history-related books.


 I am interested in the history of our country, but I am interested in how the civilization of the world has developed and how religion has been born and developed.

>>  I am interested in the history of our country, but I am interested in how the civilization of the world and  how religion has been born and has been developed.


 I read historical books and learned the origin of the name of the Philippines, the Spanish and USA domination of the Philippines, the death of Magellan, and so on.

>>  I read historical books and learned the history of the Philippines, how the Spanish and the Americans  invaded the Philippines, the death of Magellan, and so on.


 I think it\'s really fun to study history.

>> CORRECT!

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