hi, Ally,

2019-11-11 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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Some people believe that humanity is divided into distinct races, others believe that all human beings belong to only one race. What do you think? I think that humanity was a single species long ago, but evolved differently depending on where they survived. I think tigers have evolved differently depending on the environment that has lived as Siberian, Bengal, and African species are slightly different. I think that when humanity is globalized in the future, race is almost similar. When we travel around the world, if we only see in detail, we can feel that the same species of plants vary slightly depending on where they are distributed. The birth of a second generation through marriage means that different races are the same species.

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Hi there, Son. ^^

Thank you for sharing this with me!

I enjoy how factual and full of information all your compositions are.

~t. Ally

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I think that humanity was a single species long ago, but evolved differently depending on where they survived.

>> I think that humanity was a single species long ago, but evolved differently depending on how they survived.

I think tigers have evolved differently depending on the environment that has lived as Siberian, Bengal, and African species are slightly different.

>> I think tigers have evolved differently depending on the environment that had lived in; as Siberian, Bengal, and African species are slightly different.

I think that when humanity is globalized in the future, race is almost similar.

>> CORRECT!

When we travel around the world, if we only see in detail, we can feel that the same species of plants vary slightly depending on where they are distributed.

>> CORRECT!

The birth of a second generation through marriage means that different races are the same species.

>> CORRECT!

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