Hi! Ally.
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Do you believe that you can still be happy if you are poor? Why or why not?
When I was young, I thought that if I loved each other, I would be happy even if I was poor.
But as I grew older, I found that economic power had to be supported to keep love going.
Love is cold over time, so I think it is almost unchanging truth that love lasts only when there is economic power.
In the past, love was the top priority in the poor age, but now it is difficult to continue happiness with love because it is compared with each other due to the difference of the rich and the poor.
I believe that happiness must be accompanied by love and economic power to last.
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Hi sir Son. ^^
But as I grew older, I found that economic power had to be supported to keep love going.
Love is cold over time, so I think it is almost unchanging truth that love lasts only when there is economic power.
In the past, love was the top priority in the poor age, but now it is difficult to continue happiness with love because it is compared with each other due to the difference of the rich and the poor.
I believe that happiness must be accompanied by love and economic power to last.
Thank you for sending a composition.
This is nicely done!
~t. Ally
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When I was young, I thought that if I loved each other, I would be happy even if I was poor.
>> When I was young, I thought that if we loved each other, we would be happy even if we ware poor.
But as I grew older, I found that economic power had to be supported to keep love going.
>> But as I grew older, I found that economic power had to be supported to keep the love going.
Love is cold over time, so I think it is almost unchanging truth that love lasts only when there is economic power.
>> Love becomes cold over time, so I think it is almost an unchanging truth that love only lasts when there is economic power or stability.
In the past, love was the top priority in the poor age, but now it is difficult to continue happiness with love because it is compared with each other due to the difference of the rich and the poor.
>> CORRECT!
I believe that happiness must be accompanied by love and economic power to last.
>> CORRECT!
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