Hi! Ally.

2019-12-23 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

학생이 쓴 원문

If you had the chance to choose a superpower, what would it be and why? If a person has a chance to have superpowers, people will choose a variety of choices. If I had a chance to have superpowers, first of all, I want to create a peaceful world without war. The second is to create a society without crime and without accidents. The third is to create a fair and just society. But man cannot have superpowers because he is not a god, therefore there is joy, anger, sadness, and fun in the human world.

강사 첨삭

Wow, yet another amazing composition. ^^

This is very philosophical!
Thank you for your effort!

~t. Ally


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If a person has a chance to have superpowers, people will choose a variety of choices.
>> CORRECT!

If I had a chance to have superpowers, first of all, I want to create a peaceful world without war.
>> CORRECT!

The second is to create a society without crime and without accidents.
>> CORRECT!

The third is to create a fair and just society.
>> CORRECT!

But man cannot have superpowers because he is not a god, therefore there is joy, anger, sadness, and fun in the human world.
>> CORRECT!

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