Hi! Ally.
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Have you heard the news about Australia? What solution would you like to suggest to end the devastation happening there?
I saw on the news that in Australia, forest fires in many areas are burning and animals are burning to death in the forest fires.
Many experts have diagnosed the cause of the forest fires in Australia as related to global warming.
Australia is suffering from forest fires every year, and moderate forest fires make the forest ecosystem healthy, but excessiveness brings many animal and plant deaths and disasters.
The management of forests needs to be modeled on Japan, an advanced country, and Japan has various systems such as making roads to forests and cutting trees to manage forests.
Because wildfires by natural fires are difficult to defend in advance, we should think of ways to turn off fires.
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Have you heard the news about Australia? What solution would you like to suggest to end the devastation happening there?
I saw on the news that in Australia, forest fires in many areas are burning and animals are burning to death in the forest fires.
I saw on the news that in Australia, forest fires in many areas are burning and animals are burning to death in the forest fires.
>>> CORRECT
OR: I saw on the news that in Australia, forests in many areas are burning and animals are burning to death too.
Many experts have diagnosed the cause of the forest fires in Australia as related to global warming.
>>> CORRECT
Australia is suffering from forest fires every year, and moderate forest fires make the forest ecosystem healthy, but excessiveness brings many animal and plant deaths and disasters.
>>> CORRECT
OR: Australia is suffering from forest fires every year, moderate forest fires make the forest ecosystem healthy, but too much leads a lot of animals and plants distractions and deaths.
The management of forests needs to be modeled on Japan, an advanced country, and Japan has various systems such as making roads to forests and cutting trees to manage forests.
>>> CORRECT
Because wildfires by natural fires are difficult to defend in advance, we should think of ways to turn off fires.
>>> CORRECT
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