HI Aurora
학생이 쓴 원문
Good afternoon!
I am also happy to see you again in new year! I hope we have a great time in class, even time is not long. ^^
I had a trip at last weekend with girlfriend, as i mention it, i went to the southern part of Korea, not North. ^^
I had a good time during travel, eating very delicious food, watching island and sea, walking ther shore. Especially, when i was moving by train(in the train), i was able to see the beautiful scenery throught the train's window. It snowed, it made exotic atmospare, we felt like travelling in Siberia.
Well, I had a conflict with girlfreind during trip, but she forgave me and we resolved now.
As we talked in the class, i hope my wishes come true in this year and yoo too ^^
See you tomorrow!
강사 첨삭
I could easily picture how it was like travelling on a train and seeng all those lovely sceneries through your window. The Southern part of Korea must be really beautiful. I wish all your plans will come true too. Regarding your composition, do not forget to capitalize the letter \"I\". Thanks for sharing this [이름]. Talk soon!
T. Aurora
Good afternoon!
>>Correct!I am also happy to see you again in new year!
>>I am also happy to see you again this new year!
I hope we have a great time in class, even time is not long. ^^
>>I hope we\'ll have a great time in class even though our time is not long. ^^I had a trip at last weekend with girlfriend, as i mention it, i went to the southern part of Korea, not North. ^^>>I had a trip last weekend with my girlfriend, as I mentioned. I went to the southern part of Korea, not in the North. ^^
I had a good time during travel, eating very delicious food, watching island and sea, walking ther shore.
>>I had a good time during my travel, eating very delicious food, watching islands and the sea, and walking along the shore.
Especially, when i was moving by train(in the train), i was able to see the beautiful scenery throught the
train\'s window.
>>When I was in the train, I was able to see the beautiful scenery through the train\'s window.
It snowed, it made exotic atmospare, we felt like travelling in Siberia.
>>It was snowing so it made sort of like an exotic atmosphere. We felt like we\'re travelling in Siberia.Well, I had a conflict with girlfreind during trip, but she forgave me and we resolved now.
>>Well, I had a conflict with my girlfriend during the trip, but she forgave and we resolved it.As we talked in the class, i hope my wishes come true in this year and yoo too ^^
>>As we talked in class, I hope my wishes will come true this year as well as for you.See you tomorrow!
>>Correct!
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