hi beth~

2020-01-20 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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Hi, Beth, have a good day for first day of week I spent looking for moving to another area. Because we have a lease this home, so it\'ll expire after 1 year. We went to Kimpo of we are thinking that one of them. But I didn\'t like that the place because of traffic. So I gave up that. We\'ll go another area after national holiday next week. Ok~, here are sentences what I think essay If you could live anywhere, where would you like to live and why? This homework is same that I have my worry. Actually, I hope to live in Seoul that it is my hometown. if my baby live that, he\'ll have various experiences. And it takes a short time more than here for my honey\'s workplace. But there is double expensive more than here. So we\'re looking for a good place in Seoul.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]. Thank you for this. There are a lot of good opportunities living in the capital city, Seoul. However, you would also need to keep up with the high cost of living.

- T. Beth
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Hi, Beth, have a good day for first day of week.

>>> Hi, Beth. Have a good day on this first day of the week.

I spent looking for moving to another area. Because we have a lease this home, so it\'ll expire after 1 year.

>>> I spent time looking for another place to move to in a different area because the lease expires in a year.
We went to Kimpo of we are thinking that one of them. But I didn\'t like that the place because of traffic.

>>> We went to Kimpo which is one of the places we are considering, but I didn\'t like that the place because of traffic congestion.

So I gave up that.

>>> So I gave up on that.
We\'ll go another area after national holiday next week.
>>> We\'ll go to another area after the national holiday next week.
Ok~, here are sentences what I think essay
>>> Okay, here are the sentences I could think of for the essay.
If you could live anywhere, where would you like to live and why?

This homework is same that I have my worry.

>>> This homework is the same to what I am worried about.
Actually, I hope to live in Seoul that it is my hometown.

>>> Actually, I hope to live in Seoul which is my hometown.

if my baby live that, he\'ll have various experiences.

>>> If my baby would live there, he\'ll have various experiences.

And it takes a short time more than here for my honey\'s workplace.

>>> And it takes a shorter time compared here to my honey\'s workplace.

But there is double expensive more than here.

>>> But the cost of living is twice than here.

So we\'re looking for a good place in Seoul.

>>> correct

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