hi Beth! this is homework~
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Homework
ESSAY (Please write a short essay to answer the question.)
> Why is English fluency significant for you?
Hi, Beth, this is Homework for me. ^^
now i\'ll make sentence to essay
Topic : Why is English fluency significant for you?
Here are two reasons.
In first,
I have always known to lack vocabulary.
When I got married, we(me and my honey) went to Europe in London and Paris for honeymoon.
I felt panic whenever I speak English and I didn\'t have confidence.
But now, I have a baby. So I do learn English and talk to my baby in English
Then, if we go abroad I could speak English in confidence
Second,
I want to another job better then now.
Usually, it requests official grade in English in Korea to gain a job.
So I must study to upgrade my level highly and ready for English interview
I think it takes to 6 months more for upgrade my level. So I\'ll try to do the best.
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Hello [이름]! Thank you for this. Mastering English is indeed not that easy, but it is very possible. Good luck!
- T. Beth
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Here are two reasons.>>> correct
In first, I have always known to lack vocabulary.
In first, I have always known to lack vocabulary.
>>> First, I have always known that I lack vocabulary.
When I got married, we(me and my honey) went to Europe in London and Paris for honeymoon.
>>> correct
I felt panic whenever I speak English and I didn\'t have confidence.
I felt panic whenever I speak English and I didn\'t have confidence.
>>> I felt panicked whenever I spoke English and I didn\'t have confidence.
But now, I have a baby. So I do learn English and talk to my baby in English.
But now, I have a baby. So I do learn English and talk to my baby in English.
>>> Bow that I have a baby, I learn English and and talk to my baby in English.
Then, if we go abroad I could speak English in confidence
>>> Then, if we go abroad I could speak English with confidence.
Second, I want to another job better then now.
Then, if we go abroad I could speak English in confidence
>>> Then, if we go abroad I could speak English with confidence.
Second, I want to another job better then now.
>>> Second, I want a better job than the one I have now.
Usually, it requests official grade in English in Korea to gain a job.
>>> Usually, it is required to have a good English test score in Korea to get a job.
So I must study to upgrade my level highly and ready for English interview
So I must study to upgrade my level highly and ready for English interview
>>> So, I must study to upgrade my level and be ready for an English interview.
I think it takes to 6 months more for upgrade my level.
I think it takes to 6 months more for upgrade my level.
>>> I think it will take six more months for me to upgrade my level.
So I\'ll try to do the best.
>>> So I\'ll try to do my best.
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